For my Kennedy summary revision, I had a few things to change and add, but nothing major. I didn’t put a title on my first one, so I added that, and I had to fix my heading. A major thing I needed to change was using Ms. Kennedy instead of Caroline, and also I needed to make sure to include the title of the essay. Although I added some content to make the summary a little longer, I didn’t change the structure much at all. I felt like it was set up well, I just needed to add a little, and to spice it up. I used the “They Say I Say” book to try to change a couple of the words to make the writing more academic.

As for my “Just Be Nice” analysis, I had a bit more revising to do. I reorganize the structure a bit to go more with my thesis statement of my paper. I took the themes in my thesis statement and expanded on them more. I analyzed them deeper rather than just summarized them. I tried to at least. A couple of my paragraphs were pretty much just a summary, so I had to take a lot of that out. I was able to keep some of my original in there because it was analytical. I redid my conclusion completely. I wasn’t sure exactly what my thesis was in my first draft, so the conclusion didn’t go with what I made my final thesis. So I redid it and restated my thesis, and I tried to make the ending interesting.

I thought revising these would be worse than it ended up being. I’m still going to go through them again to make sure I have the MUGS part down, but finding the content and redoing it wasn’t as bad as I thought it would be. Hopefully I did a good job at revising these papers!